Commission Unit- The Pitch and Feedback

Today myself and Andy pitched our idea for our documentary film piece to our course leader Helen, Fergus and an outside visitor that has previously worked with the BBC on several programs.
Before we entered for the pitch we decided it would be a good idea to finalise our idea as well as make sure that the treatment document that we wanted to submit was up to date and contained all the information that we wanted to bring up in the pitch.

When we entered the board-room to present our pitch, the first thing we did was make sure each member of the commissioning body had a copy of our treatment document and that we introduced ourselves in an appropriate, business-like manor.
We began our pitch by simply explaining what our documentary was going to be about and what our intentions were while we are making it (AKA: What we want to learn, who we want to speak to and what kind of impression we want our documentary film piece to leave on the viewer when they have finished watching.)
Once we had established what our documentary was to be about,we began to explain more technical aspects of the project, such as what channel and time-slot our documentary would be shown in and appeal to. We explained that our documentary would be shown on BBC3, and we also explained that we would want our documentary to be shown in a time-slot where it would not have to compete with soap operas, which often monopolise the viewing habits of people. We also explained what our target audience would be and why we believed that appealing to this target audience would be the most appropriate thing to do.
We explained that our documentary would cater to many different age-groups and social statuses, but also that the main kind of audience we would be going for would be drivers and people who like the subject of organisations and individuals standing up against large corporate entities such as the government and other people in authority positions.
One thing that was noted from our treatment document that we handed in was that the suggested TV Listing description I created was very suggestive and biased in the way it was presented. Whilst I didn't think this when I first created the piece of writing, I began to understand as the commissioners explained to me that using the word "corrupt" in such a way pretty much makes it seem as though our documentary film piece has already decided to side with the NoToMob, instead of giving fair, impartial information.
Therefore, the newly updated TV listing description will read:
“An investigative look into the world of "corrupt" parking-law enforcement, and the vigilante group that battle against them on the streets of urban Medway.”
Quotation marks have been added around the word corrupt.
Throughout the pitch, many comments were made from the commissioning members, and a lot of them were helpful when it comes to making adjustments to our overall story development and how we plan to approach the creation of our documentary.