Fiction Adaptation Unit- Essay Feedback

I recently received the feedback for my Fiction Adaptation Unit, and found the experience to be very useful. The major point of the feedback I received was that I had mentioned Stanley Kubrick and Stephen King a little too much in certain areas of my essay. 

This is something I have already outlined myself in a previous blog where I stated that my essay was in danger of turning into a piece of writing whose subject was purely on those two people. This is a simple fix however, and I will improve this part of my essay by going back and removing some of the parts that are less relevant and making sure that whatever is left relates directly to Question 1 which I am answering.

Some other suggestions that were made were that I should focus on putting most of my efforts into researching Adaptation itself, and use a notable book to define what an adaptation is, as opposed to using a dictionary to define the meaning. This is something I should be able to accomplish quite simply as long as the books I need are available. A problem I had before was that the books on adaptation I wanted to use to find the meaning of adaptation were taken from the library, and as such weren't available to me. I will have to make sure that I am better prepared in the future, and possibly buy the books I need myself.

In terms of things I got praised for in my essay- the formatting and my use of Harvard referencing were apparently perfect and needed no change, which was good to know. I was also told that I had a good style of writing, and explained my points correctly, however- there were one or two areas were my writing started to deviate into a more informal style of writing, which is generally frowned upon in essay writing. I will be sure to return to these areas and try to make the same points, but with a much more focused style of writing and wording.

Something I learnt from my tutorial was that I am able to effectively "break the 4th wall" in my essay. This was something I was unsure of, and I didn't know whether or not I was able to make such statements as "this document will be a discussion of..." or "in this essay the following will be evaluated" etc. This point, although small was something I was quite unsure of, but now I know certain points in writing this essay and future ones should be a lot easier for me.